The Big Splash 29.07.14
I finally have done all the obstacles in the mud run but there is one obstacles left… THE BIG SPLASH!!! The big splash is cold and a bit deep with eels in it.
I ran up to the pond and...SPLASH!!! My heart started pounding, I felt a chilly feeling around my body. The pond was deep and the water went in my eyes. I ran as fast as can.
As I went out of the pond I was saturated. My clothes felt like they were dragging behind me. I kept running to the finished line. I had a big smile on my face. I did it, I thought to myself. “She looks wet!!!” said the host which was dressed as Mr Incredible. I was so proud of myself, even though I smelt bad but that didn’t matter!
That seems very scary with the eels and the deepness that you said in your writing. I would be so scared to do that.
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Wow Jorden, that's hardcore. I don't think I have the guts to do that. You showed persistence and never gave up. But I love your writing. Small moments are really changing the way we write. Descriptive writing is making it sound so realistic I can just visualize it in my mind. Some fantastic writing.
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